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Apostrophes with Family Names

The September 2 edition of the Huffington Post featured an article about Oprah Winfrey’s dislike for reality shows–an issue now that Carson Kressley, the host of an Oprah Winfrey Network show, will be a contestant on this season’s Dancing with the Stars.

A sentence in the story caught my editor’s eye: the network “has the O’Neil’s and The Judd’s which might not be as crazy as some of VH1 and Bravo shows, but nevertheless they are reality shows.”

Nope. It “has the O’Neils and The Judds….” without apostrophes. Apostrophes don’t mean “more than one.” They signify “of ” ideas.

And the title of the show is misspelled: It should have been spelled The O’Neals, and that which clause should have begun with a comma. So many mistakes in one sentence!

To learn more about apostrophes with family names, click here.

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Ten Rules for Writers

Many people mistakenly think that writing rules are only for students and novice writers. The truth is that most good writers have gradually assembled a set of rules that they rely on for everything they write. Here are 10 rules for writers that I’ve found useful in my own career as a writer, teacher, and editor:

1. Don’t tell readers what they already know. Good writers always have something fresh to say. (Remember when you were growing up and stopped listening the moment an adult started lecturing you on Responsibility or Good Behavior?)

One good strategy is to explore your theme from a fresh angle. If you’re writing about the winter holidays, try setting your story in a warm climate. If you’re discussing ways to keep love alive in a marriage, include a few anecdotes about couples who overcame unusual problems. Better yet, explore a topic that will be brand new to many of your readers: An unusual way to solve a common problem, a fresh outlook on an ordinary experience.

2. Make your point of view clear right from the beginning. Avoid ambiguous statements like “Many people believe…” or “A recent study shows…” It’s much better to clarify your point of view with a statement like “many people mistakenly believe” or “a helpful recent study shows.”

3. Make it easy for readers to understand what you’ve written. If there are seven or eight women in your story or article, remind readers that Alice is your central character’s sister-in-law. The same holds true for chronologies (don’t expect readers to remember 13 pages later that it’s still 1922) and unusual words, which you should define in context: “We toured a fascinating exhibit about the troglodytes (cave-dwellers) who used to live there.”

4. Have a plan. You should know your main point, supporting ideas, and examples before you start drafting your paper or article. If you’re not sure where you’re going (as often happens when you’re researching a new topic), write a discovery draft first. A rambling, I-don’t-know-where-it’s-taking-me draft is a great way to explore a topic–but don’t mistake it for a final draft.

Be especially wary if you’re taking a long time to arrive at your main point. Your thesis belongs near the beginning, not the end (see Rule 2).

5. Cut, cut, cut. Omit everything that doesn’t match your thesis. If you’re writing about your wonderful trip to Rome, don’t mention anything negative that happened (bad weather, shoddy service, delays).

This principle often bothers novice writers: Isn’t it dishonest to omit parts of the story? The answer is an emphatic no. Every detail, fact, and description should support your overall point. What if you don’t know what point you’re making? That’s a sure sign you’re writing a discovery draft (see Rule 4).

6. If a sentence contains more than three commas (unless you’re writing a list), it’s probably too complicated. Consider rewriting it.

7. Take a long look at every and, asking yourself whether the sentence should be rewritten. Although and is a wonderfully useful word, sometimes it oversimplifies sentences, and sometimes it’s simply…boring.

John sat down at the piano, and he entertained our guests with some gorgeous music. WEAK

John sat down at the piano, entertaining our guests with some gorgeous music. BETTER

8. In general, limit each sentence to only one idea. Cramming too many ideas and details into a sentence frustrates readers and may even convince them to stop reading. If a sentence has to be read twice, it’s too complicated: Rewrite it.

9. Make the first sentence in each paragraph (the topic sentence) relate to your theme or point of view. If there’s a Golden Rule of Writing, this is it. This lovely rule will help you eliminate anything that needs to be cut (see Rule 5), and it makes the reading process smooth and speedy. More than any other practice, this practice will ensure that readers enjoy what you’ve written.

10. Use climaxes. This rule will help you sound like a professional writer. (Good news for student writers: This is a great technique for impressing your teachers.) Here’s how: If you have three examples, save the biggest or most important for last.

For my tenth birthday, my parents gave me a Monopoly game, a catcher’s glove, and a shiny red bicycle. CLIMAX

When you’re organizing your supporting ideas, save the paragraph with your most important point for the end. Use an introductory phrase that sounds emphatic, like most important or best of all. Never use finally, last, or last but not least: They suggest that you’re almost finished and readers can stop paying attention.

That’s it! Follow these 10 rules, and you’ll soon see a vast improvement in your writing.

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A Sentence about Finland

Because my grandmother was Finnish, and my aunts spoke the Finnish language, and I have a close friend who’s Finnish, I always feel that Finland doesn’t get the attention it deserves. So I was very pleased to find an article about Finland’s excellent school system in the latest issue of Smithsonian Magazine

…which is where I came across this mouthful of a sentence (you need to know that “Louhivuori” is the last name of a Finnish teacher pictured in the article):

The school where Louhivuori teaches served 240 first through ninth graders last year; and in contrast with Finland’s reputation for ethnic homogeneity, more than half of its 150 elementary-level students are immigrants—from Somalia, Iraq, Russia, Bangladesh, Estonia and Ethiopia, among other nations.

Helsinki, we have a problem. The sentence refers to “Finland’s reputation for ethnic homogeneity….” What does that mean? “Reputation” is an ambiguous word. It could mean that Finland really is ethnically homogeneous – or, by contrast, that Finland has wrongly been characterized that way.

A little tinkering with the sentence would have made things clear: “Finland’s well-deserved reputation…” or “Finland’s longstanding reputation…”

I checked Wikipedia and discovered that Finland indeed is one of the most ethnically homogeneous nations in Europe–but the times, they are a-changin’.

Ethnicity issues aside, that’s an awfully long sentence, containing six or seven ideas:

  • Louhivuori teaches in a school with 240 students
  • The elementary level has 150 students
  • Grades one through nine are taught there
  • Finland has a longstanding reputation for ethnic homogeneity
  • Half the elementary-level students are immigrants
  • They come from Somalia, Iraq, Russia, Bangladesh, Estonia, Ethiopia, and other nations

I’d say that information warrants at least two sentences–wouldn’t you agree?

Clarity is high on the list of essential qualities of good writing – and deservedly so. Usage errors, poor organization, and other sins can be forgiven. But if we miss what the author is trying to say, the whole purpose of reading and writing is lost.

A good remedy is to ask a friend to read over what you’ve written before you submit it for publication. If you can find someone who’s really sharp, like my husband (who read the Finland article before I did and spotted the offending sentence), you’re really in luck.

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Jibe or Gibe?

Turns out I don’t know which word to use: jibe or gibe.

I made this discovery when I took a Washington Post editing quiz based on the latest edition of the AP Stylebook. Anyone who’s serious about writing should have a sense of the things that editors do and the issues they have to deal with (like the difference between jibe and gibe – sigh).

Note that I’m not saying you should memorize the AP Stylebook, or even that you have to follow it. The AP (for Associated Press) Stylebook tells journalists how to handle various usage questions, and often the decisions are arbitrary: Is it Queen or queen? Pope or pope? Synch or sync? (Answers: queen and pope, unless a name follows, such as Queen Victoria; sync, without the h.)

Many organizations and institutions have their own stylebooks. At the college where I used to teach, the stylebook (which I helped write) decreed that President should be capitalized. We didn’t care that the AP Stylebook didn’t do it that way: We thought our President (an amazing woman, by the way) deserved a capital letter.

If you enjoy tangling with issues like these, perhaps you should think about a career in publishing or editing. And if your future does seem to lie in that direction, it would be a good idea to get your hands on the AP Stylebook to learn more about what editors do.

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The Dangling Modifier

What’s a dangling modifier? “Dangling” means hanging, and a “modifier” is a description. So a “dangling modifier” is a “hanging description,” or a description in the wrong place.

A dangling modifier is usually easy to spot because it sounds ridiculous. Take a look at these examples:

Spattered around the room, Jones photographed the blood.  DANGLING MODIFIER

I spotted broken glass searching for evidence.  DANGLING MODIFIER

I saw a bloody knife walking through the bedroom.  DANGLING MODIFIER

Here are the corrected sentences:

Jones photographed the blood that was spattered around the room. CORRECT

While searching for evidence, I spotted broken glass. CORRECT

Walking through the bedroom, I saw a bloody knife. CORRECT

Sometimes it’s harder to spot a dangling modifier. To most people, this sentence probably looks correct on first reading – but it isn’t:

Questioning inmate Kelly, he said his sister had bought the watch for him.  DANGLING MODIFIER

There are two problems with the sentence. First, Kelly didn’t do the questioning. Second, the sentence doesn’t specify who did. The omission might create a problem in a disciplinary hearing, when it’s important to identify all the parties involved.

Here’s the corrected sentence:

When I questioned inmate Kelly, he said his sister had bought the watch for him. CORRECT

Be careful when you start a sentence with an -ing word: Often it will contain a dangling modifier. If you do start a sentence with an -ing word, reword it to make sure it’s clear who did what.

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Check the Beginning of a Sentence

Hints of possible sentence problems often show up at the beginning of a sentence. Here are four tips you’ll use again and again:

1.  Anything that begins with a person, place, or thing is probably a real sentence and should end with a period.

My trip to Hawaii did not begin well.  SENTENCE

If what you’ve written doesn’t begin with a person, place, or thing, it’s probably an extra idea. That’s ok – but remember that it can’t stand alone. It should a) end with a comma and b) be attached to a real sentence.

Although my trip to Hawaii did not begin well,  EXTRA IDEA

Although my trip to Hawaii did not begin well, I had a wonderful time there.  SENTENCE

(Click here to read about Comma Rule 1.)

2.  Remember that it is a thing. Here’s a handy rule of thumb: If it starts with it, it’s a sentence. (This tip can save you from many run-on sentences.)

I pushed on the door, it wouldn’t open.  INCORRECT

I pushed on the door. It wouldn’t open. CORRECT

3.  The beginning of a sentence usually tells you who or what the sentence is about. Use that information to solve problems with subject-verb agreement.

Changes in top management (has, have) caused cancellations and delays.

Focus on the word changes, and you’ll know immediately that the verb should be has. [Use…has]

Changes in top management have caused cancellations and delays.  CORRECT

(Click here to read about Subject-Verb Agreement Rule 4.)

4.  Be especially careful about starting sentences with -ing words. Of course it’s correct to start a sentence with a word ending in –ing: Just remember that you risk writing a sentence fragment or a dangling modifier.

Loving her the way he does.  FRAGMENT

Loving her the way he does, he can’t bear to see her in so much pain. 
CORRECT

Loving her the way he does, the cost of the ring didn’t matter.  DANGLING MODIFIER

Loving her the way he does, he didn’t worry for an instant about cost of the ring. CORRECT

If you’re interested in improving your writing, one practice that will pay off again and again is to check the beginning of each sentence. A highlighter makes it easy. Try it!

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Photo © Justin Smith / Wikimedia Commons, CC-By-SA-3.0

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Examples of Misnomers

Today’s topic is examples of misnomers.

On Wednesday Michele Bachmann challenged widespread fears that failure to raise the debt limit could lead to economic catastrophe. “This is a misnomer that the president and the Treasury secretary have been trying to pass off on the American people,” she said.

No, Michele. It’s a misconception. When David Letterman jokingly talks about “Michele Obachmann,” that’s a misnomer.

Misnomers are incorrect or inappropriate names. Want some examples of misnomers? Columbus called Native Americans “Indians” because he thought he had landed in India. His name for the people he found here is a misnomer. Theodore Roosevelt’s “Charge up San Juan Hill” is another misnomer: The actual name was Kettle Hill.

My husband, a horticulturist with a passion for palms, is constantly correcting people who talk about their “traveler’s palms”and “ponytail palms.” Both those common names are misnomers: traveler’s plants (the correct name) are related to bananas, and ponytail plants (again, the correct name) are members of the lily family.

If you think you can grow tulips in Central Florida (where we live), that’s a misconception.

We once owned a short-haired cat with a bad temper that somehow acquired the name “Fluff.” That was a misnomer (and for a long time we had the scratches to prove it).

Tulips Wiki Commons

 

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Oxford Comma

Sound the alarm: The Oxford Comma has met its demise.

Except that’s not really true. Turns out the Public Relations department at Oxford (not the entire University) is advising against the Oxford comma in its latest style sheet – a sensible decision, as it turns out (even though I, for one, love that comma).

First, let’s explain that the Oxford Comma is the last comma before and in a series of three or more. Here’s an example:

We served coffee, tea, and lemonade to our guests.  CORRECT

Oxford University has its own publishing company, and editors are instructed to use that comma.

Journalists, on the other hand, generally don’t use that comma. A newspaper reporter would write the sentence this way:

We served coffee, tea and lemonade to our guests.  CORRECT

Since the Public Relations department issues press releases to newspapers and magazines, it makes sense for them to omit that comma. But some commentators thought the whole University was dropping the comma, and…well, it’s been a long time since I’ve seen so much anguish about a punctuation mark.

Why do I like that comma? I think it clarifies sentences and makes the reader’s job easier. For example, take a look at this partial sentence, and see if you can decide where it might be going:

Suddenly the car, passengers and all

I think you’d expect the sentence to turn out something like this:

Suddenly the car, passengers and all, rolled into a ditch.

But if you put that comma in, you can tell that the sentence is going somewhere else:

Suddenly the car, passengers, and all

Here’s the completed sentence:

Suddenly the car, passengers, and all their luggage rolled into a ditch.

I vote for the Oxford comma.

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Is it Lay or Laid?

Here’s a vexing grammar problem: Is it lay or laid? Forms of lie/lay cause a great deal of confusion, and it seems that journalists struggle as much as the rest of us do.

A lay/laid problem caught my eye in a news story about the Casey Anthony murder trial yesterday. First, some background: Casey Anthony is accused of murdering her two-year-old daughter Caylee. (We’re getting a live TV broadcast of the trial, which is taking place in Orlando, less than an hour away from where my husband and I live.)

On Monday a canine handler, Jason Forgey, testified that his dog, trained to respond to decomposing human remains, had lain down in Anthony’s back yard. Here’s how our local paper, the Ledger, reported his testimony:

When deputies opened the car’s trunk, the dog jumped forward and placed his paws on the car. He then laid down, indicating an alert, Forgey testified.  INCORRECT

Oops! The writer slipped up. It should have been “He then lay down….” The past of lie is lay.

Laid is always used with an object:

I laid the paper on his desk. CORRECT

The Christian Science Monitor apparently has a better copyeditor: They got it right. Here’s how they reported the canine incident:

Jason Forgey, a K-9 officer with the Orange County Sheriff’s Office, said his dog stood on his hind legs and put his head and paws into the open trunk of Casey Anthony’s 1998 Pontiac Sunfire. The dog then lay down on the ground near the car’s right tail light and made eye contact with Deputy Forgey. CORRECT

Very few people use the various forms of lie and lay correctly. Knowing lie/lay/laid/lain sets you apart from the pack – highly recommended!

 

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Prepositions

Many writers are wary of prepositions and prepositional phrases. They’ve got to be hard, right? After all, “prepositional” is a five-syllable mouthful of a word.

Well, there’s good news and bad news. Bad news first: Many writers make mistakes with prepositional phrases.

The good news? There’s an easy rule that will keep you out of trouble. And here’s even better news: There’s also an easier rule that works maybe 99.5% of the time.

Let’s get started.

Prepositions are small, everyday words that indicate direction or purpose. The English language has dozens of them. For now, let’s stick to six: in by for with to of.

Prepositions are rarely used by themselves. You wouldn’t say “I went skiing with.” Expressions like “with Mary,” “to the store,” “for a wedding gift, “by myself” and so on are prepositional phrases.

There are a couple of general rules of thumb that work really well with prepositional phrases. Take your pick! Either one will help you get your sentences right.

  • Skip the prepositional phrases to get the grammar right
  • Go to the beginning of the sentence.

Maybe once or twice a year you’ll come across a sentence that works differently. That means most of the time you can use one of these rules, and you’ll be fine. (If you’re curious about the exception, click here and read Rule 6.)

Let’s try a couple of examples.

The bookcase with the glass doors (need, needs) to be emptied and moved.

What will you be emptying and moving – the glass doors or the bookcase? You can either go to the beginning of the sentence (“bookcase”) or cross out “with the glass doors.”

If you go with crossing out “with the glass doors,” here’s what your sentence will look like:

The bookcase with the glass doors (need, needs) to be emptied and moved.

Answer: The bookcase NEEDS. So here’s your sentence:

The bookcase with the glass shelves needs to be emptied and moved. CORRECT

Let’s try another one:

Misunderstanding of department policies (have, has) caused many problems recently.

What caused the problems – department policies or misunderstanding? Again, you can either go to the beginning of the sentence (misunderstanding) or cross out “of departmental policies.”

Let’s try crossing out “of departmental policies”:

Misunderstanding of department policies (have, has) caused many problems recently.

Answer: Misunderstanding HAS. So here’s your sentence:

Misunderstanding of department policies has caused many problems recently. CORRECT

To learn more about prepositional phrases, click here and read Rule 4.

One more thought: There’s a reason why writers often have difficulty with prepositional phrases. Most people aren’t used to thinking about parts of sentences. It’s not a normal activity. (When was the last time you found yourself thinking, “Hey! That was a prepositional phrase!” during a conversation?)

You’re learning a new skill. Be patient with yourself, and keep reviewing and practicing. After a while it will become second nature. That’s a promise!

 

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