Here’s a weak sentence I came across recently. See if you can figure out what I don’t like about it:
This cold-hardy, pest-proof, drought-tolerant shrub thrives in sun or light shade and is long lived.
The answer is that the sentence sputters. Your writing should always feel as if it’s going somewhere. And there’s a second problem: too much information has been crammed into one sentence.
Here’s my version:
This long-lived shrub is cold hardy, pest proof, and drought-tolerant. Even better, it thrives in sun or light shade.