This is a tough one. The reason for “my” is clear, but I really do not like the sentence. The…
Good points, Jean. When I tutor students in writing, I tell them that the thesis statement of any essay, no…
I appreciate this is a very old post, but I want to say I entirely agree with you. But, you…
Jean, I agree whole-heartedly with you about compliments on one's writing. I recently received feedback an a review I wrote;…
You say: "He has at times enthused about good-natured restaurants with inexact kitchen standards, like Sammy's Roumanian Steakhouse, on the…
I had a hard time with the pronunciation focus on the word pans. Said one way the sentence flowed differently.…
Aside from the punctuation issue, the sentence seems overly long and uses very lengthy words. Why say "disproportionately" and "corporate…
Nice! I especially like the ellipsis. Maybe the New Yorker should give you a job! Thanks, Kelly.
I vote for keeping the break after civil; it makes it clear where the sentence is going, without the reader…
Jean, I love the details in your post. By adding the name/label/word to feeling or action, the result may allow…