Updating Business Language

Is your business language out of date? Business writing is often clogged with unnecessary words and outdated expressions. For example:

During the month of August, store hours will be extended for the purpose of  holding back-to-school sales.

Here’s a much better way to state the same information:

In August, store hours will be extended for back-to-school sales.

Or:

In August, the store will stay open later for back-to-school sales.

Here’s an activity for you: Can you make these words and phrases more effective?

in the event that

blue in color

due to the fact that

if or when

prearrange

whether or not

large in size

at an earlier date

in order to

as per your request

Here’s how I rewrote them:

in the event that if

blue in color

due to the fact that because

if or when

prearrange

whether or not

large in size

at an earlier date

in order to

as per your request as you requested

How did you do?

2 thoughts on “Updating Business Language

  1. Darlene

    Can you recommend a program that could assist with teaching me about business writing. Thanks.

  2. ballroomdancer Post author

    Hi, Darlene! I have several blog posts about business writing (use the search term “business”). I’d also suggest checking Amazon.com or your local library for books. I don’t have anything special to recommend. Usually you can see free previews at Amazon, so you can browse and find a book that meets your needs.

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